A new Storyline

I have decided to change a couple of things about my short film.
The main themes are kept the same; a teenager becoming a product of a broken society, the influence of friends etc.

However the storyline is different.

I believe that the were several problems with the previous storyline.

1) The film lacks realism. A documentary about teenagers messing around with a gun doesn't look realistic. This is obvious as they will be ultimately breaking the law.

2) There would be too much too fit inside a 5 minute short film.

3) The script also lacked realism.